Treasures of the Heart

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Charlotte brushed the leaves and limbs back from the roots and reached inside the concealed space under the tree.

Her fingers closed around the rusted box and she pulled it out of its secret place. 

The hinges of the metal lunchbox squeaked and screeched against her effort as she coaxed it open.

Inside were her treasures… a Plymouth key ring belonging to her father and a broach her mother had worn every day.

A baseball card sat under a matchbox corvette that had belonged to her little brother.  

This is all that remained from the fire 25 years ago today.

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This is my entry for Friday Fictioneers May 2, 2018 hosted by our lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. It is a wonderful challenge. Please follow the link to give it a try!! 🙂

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61 thoughts on “Treasures of the Heart

  1. At least she has that. After my Dad died, I have each of my children one of dog tags he had worn when he was in the Air Force. Don’t know what the boys did with theirs, but when my daughter came to visit last month, she was wearing hers around her neck.

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  2. After all the fires this past Fall, and what several of my friends went through in Sonoma County, this story rings absolutely true. Your story says so much in few words – a sign of a good writer.

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    • You are so sweet to say so Pamela!! It does hit kind of close to home… I lost my home to a fire when I was 7. My heart always goes out to anyone who has experienced this kind of loss. Thank you for stopping by! 😘 ❤

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    • Hey Rochelle! Thank you so much! Yes.. school has been keeping me quite busy. I have missed writing but I will make more effort now that I have more time! Thanks for stopping by! ❤

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  3. My parent’s house burned too. Fortunately, neither was hurt, but lost a treasure of family heirlooms including old photos that can never be replaced. Excellent writing. One critique, I suggest shortening secreted to just secret–it will read just the same and not be a stumbling stone for your readers.

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    • Oh wow! So sorry Russell. We lost our home when I was 7. It was a horrible experience and still haunts me when I hear sirens.
      Thank you for feedback. I went back and forth on that word. I will change it! 😉

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    • Thanks Randy!! I appreciate that! I do try to be unique in my thoughts. I never read anyone else’s story before I write my own so I am not influenced. Thank you for stopping by! ❤

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    • Thank you Linda! This prompt seemed to bring out sadness in most of us…. it is interesting how each of us come at it from such different perspectives. I think a lot of it has to do with frame of reference from our own personal stories.
      I appreciate you coming by! ❤

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  4. The most valuable things of all are those items with loving memories attached. You’ve captured that feeling perfectly. Sorry I haven’t been here, but your posts haven’t been showing up in my reader. 😦

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  5. This is incredible – it feels like you painted this scene like an artist (which you did!)
    With only 100 words, you built a scene that dropped me down next to the tree.
    Amazing.
    I am SO happy you’re writing again. Xoxo xoxo.

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